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Favourite Poetry and verse by Supach

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Funny how when

I used to write love poems

The only name

I could think of was yours.

The curving script of your name

Was my only inspiration.

The smile

That could bring me hope when I was hopeless.

The eyes that made me forget which way was up

And which way was down.

The kiss

That made flowers grow

In the graveyard of my heart.

There's no one to take care of them anymore

I've had to rip them out, just so I could breathe

Funny how now

You're just another word for heartbreak
I basically tried my hand at kind of flowery language, I guess? How was it? 
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angelenroute Featured By Owner 4 days ago  Professional Writer
I am so far behind on critiques for We-Poets, but here I am at last. So sorry for the long delay!

This is a very deep, heartfelt poem filled with some beautiful imagery and word use.  I have nothing by way of criticism really, only that I'd suggest you consider breaking it up into different stanzas.  Poetry is more easily digested in bite-size pieces, instead of one big skirt steak. :)

Sean
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mruki Featured By Owner Oct 6, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Nice work, I like the contrast between "Funny how when..." and "Funny how now..." in the poem.
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TheFlawedOne Featured By Owner Jul 13, 2014
This is very sad but I too, have felt this way before.  I ,like the flowers in the cemetary.  Great work.
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Cover-Up-Your-Scars Featured By Owner Jul 17, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you!
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MidgetR Featured By Owner Jul 13, 2014
These couple of lines worked particularly well, I think:

'There's no one to take care of them anymore 

I've had to rip them out, just so I could breathe'



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Cover-Up-Your-Scars Featured By Owner Jul 13, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you! These two, and the last two lines were my favorites :) 
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J-B-Hickock Featured By Owner Jul 13, 2014  Professional Writer
Nice work!
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Cover-Up-Your-Scars Featured By Owner Jul 13, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you!
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Supach Featured By Owner Jul 13, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
:clap: :tears:
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Cover-Up-Your-Scars Featured By Owner Jul 13, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you! 
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